Denise's+Biodata

= Hello (delete), my name is Denise Maranhês de Araújo Vaz and I’m 21 years old. I am taking a Bachelor degree at the Faculty (college) of Languages and Literature. My emphasis is “English Translation Studies”. I’m in the sixth semester of my course (delete this: course is used to refer to a subject, not to a major) and I’m not working nowadays, but (delete) (period) I would love to take a part time trainee program in my area of study, (delete the comma) in order to learn more about the translating methods like (such as sounds more formal) software, computer programs , and other things (delete) used to help the translator in his job. In the future, I hope I get a good job as a newly formed (incorrect translation) translator, or ( who knows - inappropriate in formal writing) maybe as an English interpreter. I am striving for this to be a reality in my life.=

Thank you!
Igor's Suggestions

Denise, I'd like you to change emphasis into major, as it would sound more natural ( English - Translation ). Also, try to avoid contractions such as I'm, because it wouldn't work well on writing and change methods into devices. At last, change the hope I to hope to and be a reality to become real or come true, or something like that.

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= = = = =My name is Denise Maranhês de Araújo Vaz and I am 21 years old. I am taking a Bachelor degree at the College of Languages and Literature. My major is “English Translation Studies”. Nowadays I am in the sixth semester and I’m not working. I would love to take a part time trainee program in my area of study in order to learn more about the translating devices such as softwares and computer programs used to help the translator in his job. In the future, I hope to get a good job as a translator, or maybe as an English Interpreter. I am striving for this become a reality in my life.=

=So, that’s it! This is me, and what I do, and what I expect for my future.=

=Thank you!=