Bruna's+Biodata

My name is Bruna and I'm twenty years old. I am an undergraduated student at UFMG. I work in a school at the kinder garden area as a teacher assistent and I really love children. My mother is a teacher, as I intend to be, and we work together which is a such good experience. At UFMG I'm not so right about what area I will follow, now I am doing the fourth semester of Letras. I like Linguistics, Teaching Process and I am also interested at Psichology.I hope this could be a good semester for everyone.

Marina's suggestions:

I really liked your biodata because it talks a lot about your expectations and interests.But I'm not sure about the use of "area" when you talk about the kinder garden, for me you could only say "kinder garden" and I also didn't liked your final sentence,I think you should finish with something less broad.

Best.

My name is Bruna and I'm twenty years old. I am an undergraduated student at UFMG. I work in a school at the kinder garden as a teacher assistent and I really love children. My mother is a teacher, as I intend to be, and we work together which is a such good experience. At UFMG I'm not so right about what area I will follow,  now I am doing the fourth semester of Letras . I like Linguistics, Teaching Process and I am also interested at Psichology. I hope this semester I can discover which area I like most and then focus my studies on it.

Final Version

My name is Bruna and I am twenty years old. I am an undergratuated student at UFMG, now I am doing the fourth semester of Letras. I work in a school as a teacher assistent. I really love children! My mother is a teacher, as I intend to be, and we work together which is a such good experience. I am not certain about the area I will follow at university. I like linguistics, teaching and I am also interested at psichology.I hope this semester I can discover which area I like most and then focus my studies on it.